Dear Peter, well received. Thanks for your comments and edits! Circulating to APILP (for now) mailing list. Regards, Kelvin Sent from my iPad Begin forwarded message: From: Peter Dengate Thrush <barrister@chambers.gen.nz<mailto:barrister@chambers.gen.nz>> Date: 6 May, 2014 12:04:40 am GMT+9 To: Kelvin Wong <kelvin.wong@icann.org<mailto:kelvin.wong@icann.org>> Subject: Re: [Apilp_discuss] For discussion: Draft Terms of Reference for Asia Pacific Internet Leadership Program (APILP) Kelvin I seem to be having trouble posting to the list - please forward this for me - thanks regards Peter Thanks Kelvin, This is an excellent start - it seems to have been a productive meeting at ICANN Singapore, and I am sorry I missed it. I have made some suggested changes in Version 3 of the document which I attach. In proposing these, I note first how much easier it is to critique other's work than it it is to create it - thanks again for the first draft, which sets the scene very effectively. Other than some changes such as numbering and some grammar edits, I think there could be some productive discussion about a couple of items: 1. The name - as its about Internet Governance, it seems sensible to me to include that in the name of the document and the name of the exercise. Its not just about "Internet Leadership" which is being done in many areas, of registry management, law, security etc, but specifically about IG. I think its healthier to acknowledge and display that focus. 2. I am not accustomed to describing the Asia Pacific area as "APAC", so started to re-name it AP - but didn't continue....happy to defer if there is a widespread acceptance of that abbreviation. 3. I am somewhat concerned at the current focus on the domain name industry: I have highlit the term a few times. I think both that there is more to the IG topic than that, and also that the domain name industry can be expected to be busy taking care of itself through such organisations as APTLD, ICANN and the newly formed Domain Name Association ( "DNA"). Although I think we need to be careful about opening the door to an unlimited range of topics, I have added IP address allocation mechanisms, multistakeholderism, online human rights, network security and network neutrality as possible topics. In any event, these should be signals, rather than instructions to those who will eventually draft the actual curriculum. 4. I have separated out and made clearer the tasks of preparing the curriculum from preparing business and financial plans to support it. I hope these suggestion might be thought useful in furthering the discussion - thanks. Regards Peter